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Hi. I am Chris Mooney-Singh, Programme Director of Word Forward. We commenced in 2003 and run various literary arts programmes in Singapore and Malaysia. I am also a poet, playwright, musician and peformer and have published some books and CDs

Please feel free to introduce yourself and your interests in this thread

- from the topic: Welcome Message to New Members

Recent Posts by chrismooneysingh:

Re: Poem: Raped

July 22, 2008 by chrismooneysingh

Dear Blakforst, (do plse mention your actual name pls also)

I like this a lot. Shows considerable originality of form and use of various formation of nouns and verbs in apt places. The mixing of concrete and abstract language works totally for me. And best of all I like the paired down brevity.

I also draw your attention to our general forum at http://writersconnect.org. It's new and still needs some good postings.

Welcome!

Chris

Re: A Lousy Poem That Jumps

July 22, 2008 by chrismooneysingh

Hi Gwo wei,

I like the rhetorical frame-work of the poem. Although full of abstractions I believe the concept of the poem is sound. Don't really think you need the bolded rhymes and capitalisations, although I kinda dig the itallics which strengthens the rhetoric intent of the piece IMO. The first two stanzas work well. I think you start running out of steam by S3.

And yes, better to skip the vulgarities. There are a variety of age groups here. I also recommend http://writersconnect.org, hit The forum button, where you can post more adult material. We respect word choice as and when it expresses original artistic thought.

Cheers

C

Re: Poem - can't leave without you

July 22, 2008 by chrismooneysingh

good critique Gwo Wei and Blakforst.

Cheers
Chris

Re: Welcome Message to New Members

July 22, 2008 by chrismooneysingh

Hi Simon,
Welcome to the the forum. Feel free to post your own writings, but do remember the protocol: for each piece posted please comment on two other pieces. that will ensure a steady flow of activity here.

Cheers

CMS

Re: Welcome Message to New Members

June 5, 2008 by chrismooneysingh

Hi Nicole and Grace,

Welcome to the forum. Before you post do kindly visit at least two other postings and leave a comment. That way others will feel motivated to share their thoughts about yours.

Cheers

Chris

Re: Oblivion

June 5, 2008 by chrismooneysingh

Hi,

Kindly follow the forum protocol and make two posts on other people's work before posting your own. This will help to build the sense of community give and take and ensure this forum becomes a lively discussion venue.

Not sure what you are really trying to sey to a general reader as the language is fairly pedestrian and internalised. and cliche-driven. For example instead of using the hackneyed phrase picking up the pieces in section one, you might consider imagine a situation like dropping a photograph frame or personal object that brings to mind the person who the poem is addressed to. At the moment the poem tells us about feelings rather than depicting them through concrete and original images.

Cheers

Chris

Re: Poem - can't leave without you

June 5, 2008 by chrismooneysingh

Hi Welcome to the forum. The way it works here is. Comments at least twice on other people's poems etc and then post your own. This is a community building measure to ensure that all contribute.

Meanwhile, your poem is a bit rhyme driven. If you have to dispense with them, what would you actually be saying and would you use similes and metaphors, in others more concrete pictorial language to express your idea with more originality.

cheers

Chris

Re: Welcome Message to New Members

May 26, 2008 by chrismooneysingh

Hi Hillary,

welcome. Feel free to posting any kind of writing here. I also write stories and plays as well as poems.

bye for now

Chris

Re: 4 Voices In The Dark

May 21, 2008 by chrismooneysingh

Welcome to the forum. I like these verses. It would be good to add another verse or two. The writing is clean and direct.

Voice 1: I can't find my teddy bear! I need my sunglasses to wear!
Voice 2: Don't be so demanding, brother! You ARE such a bother! < maybe 'such a square' a direct rhyme. Just a suggestion.

Welcome Message to New Members

May 18, 2008 by chrismooneysingh

Hi. I am Chris Mooney-Singh, Programme Director of Word Forward. We commenced in 2003 and run various literary arts programmes in Singapore and Malaysia. I am also a poet, playwright, musician and peformer and have published some books and CDs

Please feel free to introduce yourself and your interests in this thread

Welcome to the Word Forward Youth Writing Forum

May 18, 2008 by chrismooneysingh

Welcome to the New Word Forward Forum. Here you may post poetry, stories and playscripts and discuss a range of issues relating to writing and creative work.